I looked at it last night after I had formatted it and saw that there were 205 pages to go, I was daunted by that. Until I realised this morning that I have already edited close to 400 pages of the story. Which means I am 2/3 of the way through the final edit! Now that is exciting.
I am much happier with the story now, I have taken out excessive uses of words, double explanations and really worked on making sure there are no gaps in the story. What I have noticed though, is that my memory of the story and the interactions between the characters has not diminished, even though I wrote the story nearly two years ago. When I make an edit, I tend t find I put words in there to describe something, only to read a couple of sentences on and realise that I used exactly the same words. Not necessarily in a better way, but at least my memory of that part of the story hasn’t changed!
Once I get this finished, I will be looking for readers to make sure I have dotted all my i’s and crossed all the t’s, and that the story has a good flow. Must I must caution you, it is about 150k long, nearly 600 pages. A big job, but hopefully you will enjoy the story, so if you like Fantasy, read on:
Tycelon, leader of the Godena Tribe loves Delonia, the tribal Herbal, but Delonia wants to find her family before committing to a life long commitment. When she is taken by the Warlock, Sephron, Tycelon, Zorek the giant and the tribe must head to Amasedon to find the Queen, whom Delonia has said will help.
Along the way, they meet Ubek, a mysterious man who is extremely interested in the taking of the girl. Tycelon and Ubek immediately clash, but Tycelon is relieved when they leave the following morning, leaving Ubek behind.
In Amasedon, Tycelon discovers that the Queen, Gallandra, and Delonia’s sister are one and the same, and discovers there is more to the abduction than he first thought. It appears that Delonia is a Chrystias holder, a stone which is part of a crystal called the Balance of Power. Sephron, the Warlock, is after the stone.
Ubek, a spy for the Queen and her family, insinuates himself into the group that is being set up to recover Delonia, much to Tycelon’s disgust. He hates the man and when suspicious things start to happen, wonders whether the man might not be in league with the Warlock.
But that is the furtherest from the truth. Ubek is in fact the Last Wiseman’s Aide, an elite group of scholars that Sephron disbanded when he discovered, and lost, the third prophesy, the prophesy that brings together twins, a sword, a dagger and the keystone to create the Balance of Power.
Sephron discovers Ubek’s identity and with great satisfaction imprisons him, Tycelon, Gallandra and Zorek in the Prison City of Bleknon where they are assisted in their escape. They have to travel through the Dragonlands back to the other travellers and regroup before assaulting the castle and releasing Delonia, all without letting Sephron get his hands on the Balance of Power, but no one seems to know how the stones will all come together. Their entire journey seems to have been orchestrated from beginning to end by Sephron. What is he up to and can they eventually break the hold he has over them?
I won’t give away the ending, but it has been left open for another story, and I have had some very interesting ideas. So if you are keen to critique it, let me know, and I will make up a list – I will probably also go through Critters (not sure if I am prepared for the savaging, but willing to try!) as well. Hoping to get the finished product out mid April.