I have been editing Cursed Love to within an inch of its life, and I have to admit, even though this is a second pass through, that I am surprised by my own prose sometimes.

I love the characters of Jinny and Ethan, and Ray / Steven, although Ray / Steven needs some more work, and according to one critiquer, I need to do some more work on Jinny – to make her more likeable – and to be honest, I actually believe she is right.  I have added another couple of scenes, and have altered a couple as well to make the story flow better, plus more emotional, so that Jinny and the reader connect more.

Here is an excerpt that I just finished editing:

“My beautiful Megan was riddled with the god forsaken disease. They gave her six months, we got ten before she passed away.”

He wiped his eyes, and looked at her, Jinny’s were full of sympathy.

“She died three years ago. Which in some ways seems like forever, but in other ways, feels like only yesterday. I loved her with all my heart, I still love her. But I need to move on, find someone else.”

“How could you? After all you have been through, and the depth of the love you had? How are you able to move on?”

“We talked about it, a lot in fact, before she died. She asked me to find someone else, to be a mother for Lotte. It has taken me a while, but I feel ready now.”

“I don’t. I don’t think I could ever love again. In fact I never want to love again, as long as this curse hangs over my family. If I die, it will die out with me.”

“But the curse isn’t real.”

“Isn’t real? My mother thought it was real, that is why she killed herself. My grandmother thought it was real, because she lost her beloved. I lost the two things that brought meaning to this life. How I haven’t died before now is a miracle. But I haven’t. I vowed never to love again.”

Her words cut him deep inside, yet he couldn’t stop the overwhelming rush of warmth that flowed through him. He loved this woman, and he would show her.

This is at a point where he had confronted her about lying and she had to reveal a relationship she had years previous.  I read through this and was blown away – I felt so much compassion for Ethan, as he struggled to understand the concept of the curse that was affecting Jinny and her family.

There is still more I need to do, but I feel it is coming together nicely.

Oh, and I submitted Scarlet Rose to Entangled Publishing last week.  I expect to hear from them in 5 to 6 weeks.  Fingers crossed people!

Did I really write that???
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  • February 17, 2014 at 9:49 am
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    Don’t you love it when that happens? 🙂

    On another note, I had a slightly teary week last week, and one of the things that got me through is your previous post. Thank you xx

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