Medusa by KJM

This week has been busy.  I have been raspberry picking most mornings, and then pottering in the gardens in the afternoon.

I have managed to slip in some time with the laptop, and have added a prologue to Medusa and started with the edit on Chapter one.  Unfortunately it has been rather slow going… and I can’t really explain why.  I guess it is because I have been reading the story through and thinking about how I can change it for the better.

I have gone through and highlighted all the target words (like was, has, has been, felt, knew, etc etc) and trying to eliminate them.  And because I know have a prologue about an earlier event when Medusa and Athena first met, I have to make sure that those references are made in the first chapter, otherwise it would sound odd!

I have also decided to change a part near the end of the story where Medusa turns men to stone with her looks, because I have tried keep Medusa as close to human as possible, and turning men to stone isn’t human!  But I do have a way of making sure that this kind of works.

My only problem is, it doesn’t really need to be called Medusa’s Garden any more because here Garden will no longer be filled with statues of men.  I am not sure what to do about that, but at least I have made a start.

First Week, some progress
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3 thoughts on “First Week, some progress

  • January 9, 2012 at 9:26 pm
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    I’m intrigued with how you’ll humanise Medusa, since most modern renditions seems to only use her as a challenge for the protagonists to over come (or in God of War have the player rip off her head and use it as a weapon) but I feel I should say turning men into stone is what she’s best known for… along with having snakes for hair. I’m sure you’ll work this out and you can always change the title.

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    • January 9, 2012 at 10:54 pm
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      All myths start somewhere, and they have an element of truth about them. Here are some hints:

      What else looks like snakes when on the head? (Dreadlocks)
      Couldn’t she be so angry and such a sight while being angry that they would be rooted to the spot in surprise? (Petrified?)

      Stories have a way of growing with the telling, hence trying to get back to the roots of the “true story” behind Medusa.

      I am working on having Medusa human while there are other unearthly elements going on. I am enjoying this story very much, but needs some heavy editing!

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  • January 10, 2012 at 12:13 am
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    This sound like really good, interesting changes. I think keeping Medusa’s human side during the climax and ending will really strengthen the ending and make it more emotional. I can’t wait to read the next version. 🙂

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